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Alix@IN2LProds's avatar

I got chills reading this one. 😎

At first, I thought it was just a guy ranting about his crappy day and traffic—but then that “voice in his head” turned out to be real.

It felt so raw, like a confession from someone teetering on the edge of madness.

That ending, where he shreds the blood pact and fades away himself—wow. It’s like sin and salvation getting erased at the same time.

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Brenda - A Voice that Wonders's avatar

Wow… thank you. 😅

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Alix@IN2LProds's avatar

WOOOOW😮‍💨😮‍💨😮‍💨😮‍💨!

Well done!🤙🏻

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Carol Ann Power's avatar

Love this so much, Brenda.

Thank you

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Rea de Miranda's avatar

Goodness gracious, Brenda! This was a wild ride!!

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Brenda - A Voice that Wonders's avatar

🤣🤣 It was fun to write. A bit on the wild side I agree. ❤️

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Rea de Miranda's avatar

I love this side of you!

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Wildwood Writer's avatar

Wow, what a wild ride! The tension, the inner dialogue, and the way past and present collide is incredible. I love how chaotic and vivid it feels, like I am right there in the protagonist’s head. Absolutely gripping.

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Brenda - A Voice that Wonders's avatar

Thank you! It was fun to write 😅

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Phillip Slater's avatar

Absolutely brilliant. Slowly built towards its conclusion and also contains an important message about karma and the impact of drink driving.

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Brenda - A Voice that Wonders's avatar

Thank you😊

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